| The Last True Protectors |
[Dec. 16th, 2009|04:22 pm] |
This is a story I started working on while listening to Last of the Wilds by Nightwish. It is about faeries.
I would like feedback. Sorry for any spelling or grammar mistakes. I do not always catch them all.
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( The Last True Protectors ) |
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| I hope this is applicable and that someone comments.... |
[Dec. 16th, 2009|06:26 pm] |
I've been doing a lot of reading recently and it's made me very anxious to try and start writing again. I really enjoy. and would be looking to write some thing mythology/fantasy based, but the more I research the more I feel like everything has been done. Or, at least that there's a definite pattern in what stories/characters get used. Vampires would be the best example.
I was wondering if anyone had suggestions or knew of any useful resources/places to look that might help me think and possibly widen my options? Grateful wouldn't even cover my response if so. |
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| My first post! Hello! wait, reverse that. |
[Dec. 12th, 2009|11:28 am] |
So, I have a story in my heart (don't we all). But as I sat down to start it out I felt like I was pacing the story too quickly, I've put what I've written so far in the cut but it isn't much about three paragraphs. I didn't want to continue until I got some feedback about the pace, the content, all that jazz. So please, check it out!
( Mirror ) |
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| Writing Out Your Life |
[Dec. 14th, 2009|03:01 pm] |
I was wondering if anyone believes its good to incorporate things that are actually going in your life into your story/stories?
Is it good to give your character "your problems" and see how they would deal with them?
Would it help you through the tough times or just make everything more difficult to express? |
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| Landline |
[Dec. 14th, 2009|06:10 am] |
It sits on my tiled floor,
the same replicated in the next room, the next, and the next.
Beige fiberglass monolith,
thrill me with your timeless ring.
Landline, come alive now
as the one who lines my mind and my heart
calls to share his own.
I've gone and lost my cellular,
thank god.
Talking heads all around me regain the color of real flesh
to communicate souls
full of longing and vision.
It's nice losing your phone.
Empty of plastic vibrations,
my pocket cradles my right hand.
Now. Now.
Now.
Now I am here. I am here now.
I am not wasting time. |
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| (no subject) |
[Dec. 14th, 2009|04:46 pm] |
Title: Bliss The Phase Jumper
Rating: PG (Young Adult)
Summary: Bliss Ballard is a young Phase Jumper who was raised in one of the seven kingdoms of The Shift. From birth (a basket baby) she was told she never learn to harness magic. Now, nineteen years later and the new apprentice to the conspiracy-nut Wizard of SkyeHights. As a Phase Jumper (One who can Jump through space and land somewhere else in seconds) Master Ballard uses her as a delivery girl teaching spells on the side.
I posted part of chapter one for its ten pages long, but this is only five. She learns the basics of her delivery, partnering up with a Dympher.
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| Welcome to Hell |
[Dec. 12th, 2009|01:50 pm] |
| [ | Current Location |
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| [ | mood |
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So NaNo is over for 2009 and I've been revising and editing what I wrote for it. I was hoping to get some critique on what I've written so far. I have no illusions about my writing (as far as I'm concerned, it sucks), and would like help on sentence structure and dialogue. Please don't be afraid to be harsh in your criticism.
Title: Welcome to Hell
Author: ![[info]](http://l-stat.livejournal.com/img/userinfo.gif) takatohedgehog
Rating: PG-15
Warnings: none
Posted at: ![[info]](http://l-stat.livejournal.com/img/community.gif) cupcake_writer
Word Count: 2,071
Synopsis/summary: Every God and Goddess has to go to school. Hades is no exception. For third years at Olympia Academy it's 'that year' - the year they discover what they'll be presiding over for the rest of eternity. For some it will be a year they will never forget, and for others it will be a year they would rather not remember...
When Hades and subsequently the school learn that he will be presiding over Hell, he is shunned. Soon it seems that even his brother Poseidon has abandoned him. The only ones who don't do this are Loki - Hades' roommate, a mischievous exchange student from Scandinavia - and Bastet, a level headed cat Goddess attending the Academy from Egypt. Both whom eventually become the future ruler of the dead's best, and only, friends.
A ski trip to Mount Vesuvius during the winter holidays soon uncovers a much more sinister plot. Persephone is being targeted by an unknown force; completely unaware of the danger she's in. With the help of his friends, can Hades prove his innocence in the downfall of Pompeii and warn the school in time to rescue Persephone from the unknown threat? Or does he have to dive in headfirst with only Loki and Bastet keeping him afloat and hope for the best?
( preface and excerpt under here ) |
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| (no subject) |
[Dec. 9th, 2009|07:10 pm] |
The forum I usually frequent to get poetry critique is infuriatingly slow with actually getting any feedback, so I thought I'd try here.
( cut for profanity. ) |
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| (no subject) |
[Dec. 8th, 2009|08:27 pm] |
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Just some thoughts. I'm desperately trying to write some more...but I'm trying too hard x.x ( Read more... )
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| Please comment! |
[Dec. 7th, 2009|09:22 pm] |
Hello! This is my first post, and i'm posting a piece i wrote during my Endofyear Exams last year :-)
I'd really love your feedback! thanks in advance
( (ice) ) |
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| Don't you dare bypass this just because it's poetry! |
[Dec. 6th, 2009|11:05 pm] |
Okay. So this is my first time posting here, and coincidentally, my first attempt at poetry. So naturally, I'd like you to give me your worst. :)
Note: This is tied to northern english dialect. It's kinda like Maya Angelou's "When I think about myself" only it's not about slavery and it's much, much worse.
( Family Values -click me! ) |
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| Sincerely Chapter 1 |
[Dec. 7th, 2009|05:58 pm] |
I'd LOVE feedback on this; harsh in nature. <3
I really like this story but yeah, I could use your comments.
It's about two boys; new to a school and they develope a friendship/relationship and share their different backgrounds with each other.
http://guardiancastiel.livejournal.com/688.html |
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| first time posting...would love opinions. |
[Dec. 5th, 2009|03:55 pm] |
This is a piece I wrote for a creative writing class that I'm planning on expanding -- adding some more unrequited loves and turning it into a collection of essays called Unrequited Love: A History in Seven Parts. This is just a jumping off point, the raw material that I want to flesh out from the assignment's two-page limit.
( I want what I can't have )
Would love some feedback! Thanks in advance. |
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| I'm trying to get rid of writer's block |
[Dec. 6th, 2009|05:14 pm] |
This is my first post and I'd like to get feedback on a story I've detoured onto to try and defeat my writers block
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So I thought up two characters basically:
Jack Daniel Davenport/ Jack- He's a middle class teenager who just moved to the fictional California town of Carver with his family. His father was fired from his previous job so they relocated.
He has two identical twin infant sisters and a loving mother; his father is a bit detached.
He's artistic and a little reckless.
Carmichael Vander Wootsen/ Mike-Only teenage son of very wealthy parents; moved from Sacramento. He's very funny and laid back; open-minded and sweet.
General Plot: The two boys befriend each other since they're both new and develope an interesting relationship while going about their senior year in highschool and dealing with other life problems.
I might change the basic plot to be a bit more interesting and I know the characters sound very under developed right now but I created them at 3 in the morning D;
I'd like your thoughts and critiques <3 |
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| Question -- |
[Dec. 5th, 2009|05:07 pm] |
What is your opinion on putting song lyrics in fiction?
Is it just a tacky gimmick? Or a strong statement expressed better than you could put it yourself?
Fitzgerald quotes Ain't We Got Fun in the Great Gatsby and Tennessee Williams mentions Wien, Wien, Nur Du Allein in Streetcar. Would the modern equivalant be quoting the horrors of My Chemical Romance, Fall Out Boy, You Me At Six, etc? |
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